Wednesday, August 21, 2019

Funky Work!


This is some of the work I have been doing in class. It is from a learning website Write That Essay. It gives you work to achieve, this is Developing slides. For this particular work we had to make the sentence shorter and more intriguing.
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  1. AnonymousAugust 26, 2019 at 12:15 PM

    Ki ora Holly, my name is Iliana I am a year 8 student and currently attending St Patrick's. I like the way that you included some descriptive words for your funky work like the chief police spotted a burgulary . It would be nicer if you addded more adjectives that would hook your audience. Kindly regards.

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    1. AnonymousAugust 27, 2019 at 11:00 AM

      Thanks for your comment! I really appreciate it! Thanks again!😁

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